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Before: As we age reality seems to catch up to each one of us showing that our past aspirations may not be reachable.

After: As we age, reality seems to catch up to to each one of us , showing that our past aspirations may not be reachable. 

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Coordinating conjunction Joining Two Sentences: "This device helps one to focus AND keep in mind that’s it’s important to plan if you don’t wish to fail.

Introductory Phrase: When one asks me, my aspiration is simply to be happy

Coordinate Adjectives:  This connects well with my device because life has everything to do with planning ahead, keeping a grip on reaching your future aspiration .

Adjective Clause: A aspiration is a hope or ambition of achieving something , WHICH  is it very well known everyone wants to be successful it .

Appositive: The famous business magnate , Donald Trump once said “Get going. Move forward. Aim high

Parenthetical Expression: To be happy consists of having a successful future, so daily I remind myself if I want to reach the pot of gold at the end of the rainbow so it’s important to set a path.

Absolute Phrase: This device helps one to focus and keep in mind that’s it’s important to plan if you don’t wish to fail.

Words Expressing Contrast: Planning to have determination and be ready for hard work , failing was never an option in my lifestyle.

To Set Of A Quotation Or A Direct Address: There are plenty of different mnemonic devices you can choose from, my musical device helps me best.

Conclusion

Hook Outline : Whats your aspiration in life ? How do you keep remembrance of your goal in your daily lifestyle ? Common Aspirations , Lawyer , Doctor , Owning Own Business.

Thesis:   The musically non-rhyming  mnemonic device I use in my daily life to keep in mind of reaching my aspiration is " You fail to plan , Not plan to fail" . This device helps because it basically reminds me that if i don't plan for the future its possible i will fail to reach my goal ( my aspiration).

Conclusion: When one has such a big aspiration , it can become difficult to keep remembrance of. Having a good mnemonic device can help you throughout your daily lifestyle in trying to reach your aspiration . My device can help one to recollect the reason why they should always plan for the future. There are plenty of different mnenomic devices you can choose from , my musical device helps me best. Mnemonic devices doesn't only have to be used for the remembrance of aspirations , it can be used for any one thing.

Intro

What's your aspiration in life? Do you have a goal or objective desired that you would put your all into trying to achieve?  Many of us as kids used to most likely think of things such as being a superstar , president , etc. . Although as we age reality seems to catch up to each one of us showing that our past aspirations may not be reachable . If asked now many would possibly give answers such as being a manager , becoming a doctor , owning their own business etc. The main question is how do you keep remembrance of your goal in your daily lifestyle ?

When one asks me , my aspiration is to be happy ; to be happy consists of having a successful future . I would give my all to pursuing my want to become a very successful homicide investigator.

Hook

What's your aspiration in life? Do you have a goal or objective desired that you would put your all into trying to achieve? If one comes to mind, how so do you keep remembrance of your goal in your daily lifestyle . When one asks me I just simply reply a sort of musical mnemonic device ; a phrase which says " You fail to plan NOT plain to fail". 

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